HOW I Fixed This Crappy Email
So I opened my email today like i do everyday, and I normally laugh at the horrendous attempts at marketing that sadly enough I am guilty of peddling when i first started as well :(, But today i saw an exceptionally bad email i decided to fix and reply back to the author. It went a little like this...
Subj - Business opportunity.
Recently got this and was wondering if anyone here had
heard of it. I don't see much of it in google searches, so
maybe it's relatively untapped? I hope so. Anyway, if anyone
has seen it or is in it, can you tell me how things are going
and if things are good, give me some tips? I really like the
concept, and I already got my investment back and I got it
Saturday. But, I want to make a lot of money because my
birthday is next Friday and that is going to be a present for
me! LOL. Check the below website address out and view what
i am talking about.
And this was my reply....
Re: Business opportunity-WOW... 6 Reasons This Was Really Bad Marketing
Wow....This was really BAD Marketing...Here's Why
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1) No One Cares about your business opportunity....because even if it is the
best thing of the world it is un solicited...people hate Being SOLD on anything...
even if it is a "good" opportunity.
2) It is SPAMmy...
3) I am sure Most people didn't even open it b/c of the Subject line alone
it is not engaging at all...learn some copy writing it will help tons
4) it is obvious you are trying to pawn off some affiliate link, because you
didn't modify your hyper link, they might go to paydotcom.net with out
using your affiliate link, just because they don't want to give you the credit
5) whats up with the green lettering?...Black works better
6) It is like one big run on paragraph, people don't read things like that....
especially in unsolicited emails! your lucky if they get down to the bottom to even see your link
Good luck on the next one.
P.S. I wouldn't write another one of these types of emails without looking through
these videos because you are just going to get yourself stressed. Good Luck Again!
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So at the end of the day At least i have virtually slapped some sense into this guy and perhaps even earn a commision, but all in all i hope i have rid the world of one less Average Frustrated Marketer (AFM)
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