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Critique Wanted Please

Postby Cafem Vem on Sat Apr 21, 2012 12:35 pm

Hey everyone so I just made a new website, and i know it is terrible given i do not know any of the capture techniques or how they are used.

I would like if you could visit my website and give me some feedback or tips or anything that i should change to make it a better website that can generate more prospects.

Here it is:
www.lifestylecoffee.webs.com

and for spanish speakers:
www.cafecmoreno.webs.com

Thanks everyone!
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Re: Critique Wanted Please

Postby Harry Fassett on Sat Apr 21, 2012 2:46 pm

Just a couple quick and dirty suggestions;

1. Move the twitter feed to the right if the page and have your text be first on the far right of the page, because that's the first area the SE's look at for text and along with your site's linking structure.

2. Add a sitemap so the short spider of most engines can see it and keep it updated. E.G. XML and HTML site map, and add the XML map to google's webmaster tools.

3. Add about 400 - 500 more words of text to the homepage with your main keyword terms every 100 words or so and every 50 words or so, add similar keyword terms, and have the last paragraph end with your best foot forward with your main term you are targeting.

4. Add resource links and other relevant keyword term links to the bottom of your page for the SE's to follow.

5. Change your title tag that has "lifestylecoffe" only in it and add up to 70 characters of good relevant text there because this is the very first section the SE's see to determine what your site is all about, and very important. E.G. <title>Organo Gold Coffee - Black, Latte, Mocha, Green Tea and Hot Chocolate</title>

6. You have no back links to the page.

7. No <h1>, or even <h2> title tags.

Ok, so that was more than a few, and here's more info for you below from an SEO tool I use:

Page:
PR: n/a Cached: n/a Tw: 0 l: 1 +1: 0

Domain:
I: 0 I: 0 Dir: n/a I: n/a Dir: n/a Rank: n/a Age: n/a whois Rank: 821 Traffic: 1008145 Price: 1297705 C: 0

Backlinks:
L: 0

Others:
L: 0 LD: 0 LD2: 536444 source Robo: no Sitemap: no I: 0 I: 0 I: 0 IP: 216.52.115.51 CY: 0|0 I: 0 YCat: n/a I: n/a L: 402,000
Keywords density:

Total words: 285
Keyword Found in Repeats Density
twitter-feed-module-8411077675.twitter-feed 11 3.86
coffee 5 1.75
important 5 1.75
organo 3 1.05
gold 3 1.05
business 3 1.05
cafecmoreno 3 1.05
color 3 1.05
section 3 1.05
find 3 1.05

Total 2 word phrases: 12
Keyword Found in Repeats Density
organo gold 3 2.11
important twitter-feed-module-8411077675.twitter-feed 3 2.11
will find 3 2.11
success in 2 1.40
ago reply 2 1.40
reply retweet 2 1.40
retweet favorite 2 1.40
a twitter-feed-module-8411077675.twitter-feed 2 1.40
color ffffff 2 1.40
ffffff important 2 1.40

Total 3 word phrases: 5
Keyword Found in Repeats Density
you will find 3 3.16
ago reply retweet 2 2.11
reply retweet favorite 2 2.11
color ffffff important 2 2.11
ffffff important twitter-feed-module-8411077675.twitter-feed 2 2.11

Total 4 word phrases: 2
Keyword Found in Repeats Density
ago reply retweet favorite 2 2.81
color ffffff important twitter-feed-module-8411077675.twitter-feed 2 2.81

Anyway, I hope this helps, and if you have any more questions, feel free to contact me directly. HF


248919 wrote:Hey everyone so I just made a new website, and i know it is terrible given i do not know any of the capture techniques or how they are used.

I would like if you could visit my website and give me some feedback or tips or anything that i should change to make it a better website that can generate more prospects.

Here it is:
http://www.lifestylecoffee.webs.com

and for spanish speakers:
http://www.cafecmoreno.webs.com

Thanks everyone!
Harry Fassett - Founder of Amazines.com has been a SEO/SEM Specialist since 1995. Currently an Independent "Consumer for Charity" http://www.day1charitydonation.com
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Re: Critique Wanted Please

Postby Cafem Vem on Sat Apr 21, 2012 6:02 pm

Thanks, :) But im completely lost on how to do all those things except 2... I use webs.com to make the website.
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Re: Critique Wanted Please

Postby Harry Fassett on Sat Apr 21, 2012 6:44 pm

That's why people hire me to help them Cafem.


248919 wrote:Thanks, :) But im completely lost on how to do all those things except 2... I use webs.com to make the website.
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Re: Critique Wanted Please

Postby Cafem Vem on Sat Apr 21, 2012 6:47 pm

Ohh... How much do you charge?
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Re: Critique Wanted Please

Postby Betsy Vayda on Tue Apr 24, 2012 4:16 pm

Hello. Congrats on getting a website.

Before you start stressing about SEO and the sites complete lack of branding, you need to step back and ask what do you want the website for.

    Do you want people to sign up for your business?

    DO you want people to buy the product?

    Do you want to capture people's email addresses to market to them later?

    Why do you have 2 sites? One in english and one in spanish. You can simply have a translator tool.

Right now it is unclear what you want the visitor to do.

You aren't capturing emails.

You do have your email address on one page.

I didn't see any links to your sign up or product buying site.

It is imperative that you tell the reader what to do.

Of course, to do that you need to know what you want them to do first.

To start, the easiest thing to do is simply send people to a capture page.

YOu can build it out from there when you have the time and energy.

It is really very easy to make a capture page. Much easier what you have done here.

The easiest and most effective:

A WordPress.org site using Optimise Press. A very easy environment for capture pages that also rank well.

Also by building it on WordPress you can transform it into a full website with blog whenever you want.
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Re: Critique Wanted Please

Postby Jireh Manzano on Sat May 12, 2012 6:43 am

I like it. It is simple, elegant and easy to navigate. I like your choice of colors too. For me, they all work together.

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