Forums

[Kevin Johnson Contribution Level: 1]

Hi,

I am new here. I would like to get some help on my landing page, but after reading Ferny C.'s post on what not to do, I don't want to be out of place by creating a link to it. So, would I be out of place posting it or is too early as I am new?

Thanks

[Marty Baker Contribution Level: 5]

If it is a landing page that you are making and not some replicated site go ahead and post it. Be prepared, people will be honest with what they think.

[Richard Bravo Company: Life Force International Contribution Level: 9]

Kevin definitely post the link so we can see more details about what you need help with?

[Kevin Johnson Contribution Level: 1]

Ok, here is the link...

http://www.yourfirstyearnetworkmarketin ... -marketing

I was using the company replicated page and put this one together because I thought by having a more personal one, I would get a better click through rate. However, that was not the case and the CTR dropped to zero. So I am trying to figure out what I have done wrong. So any help is appreciated. - Thanks

[Bertus Engelbrecht Contribution Level: 2]

Overall, I think the site looks pretty good. Only constructive cristism that I have is the big blue header. Put your logo or something there. Further I think everything looks pretty professional.

[Kevin Johnson Contribution Level: 1]

Ok, I am going to see what I can do about the header. It is part of the Wordpress template that I used. Dean, I am going to try to work in your suggestions about the wording too.

[John Holcombe Contribution Level: 1]

Great page!

I have two suggestions. First, expand your testimonials. I really believe that testimonials add to you credibility. Don't over do it though. Second, I would add a paragraph about what it means to you. Don't act like a "salesman". Be yourself and tell us personally why we should purchase the 7 Great Lies.

Thanks,
John

[Landon Stewart Company: ViSalus Sciences Contribution Level: 3]

I agree the more you put about yourself and your story on the page the more people that will are going to opt in.

People like to feel like they know you, before they would ever consider giving you anything to you. Especially now-a-days when people's email addresses are nearly sacred.

People just want to know that you are a real person, which i think you did a pretty good job of, since you had your picture and all of that, but still more the more personal experiences the better.

[Bertus Engelbrecht Contribution Level: 2]

I took another look at your webpage, it looks a lot better now. Well done. What is the conversion ration at the moment if I may ask?

[Steve Orris Contribution Level: 1]

Hi Kevin.

Well done on making the break from the replicated site.

. . .

- You use a lot of metaphors (probably over done).

I hope you don't mind if I interrupt here. Is there a point at which too many metaphors are bad? Example: http://www.betternetworker.com/blogs/view-1783
Is this good story writing or is it not to the point enough?

Thanks
-Steve